Thank you Brianna, I am not good at rhyming and did this one much more by feel than by analysis. I tried to keep the rhythm and let the sense of rhyme work out as best I could. I had done an earlier version and wanted this one to be more like a song. with a chorus and a contrast between the beat of the rap style of the verses and the more melodic chorus (at least that was the way it played in my head). ben

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